Your response is a good attempt but could use some corrections in grammar and style to make it more polished. Here's a detailed assessment and improved version:
### Assessment:
1. **Opening sentence:**
- "hey, friends" is informal. It’s fine if you’re writing to close friends on social media, but for TOEFL tasks, it’s better to be a bit more formal or neutral.
- "i took a trip to US" needs two corrections:
- Capitalization: "I" should always be capitalized.
- "US" needs "the" before it. It should be "the US."
2. **Deion of the people:**
- "the couples are talking on the table" should be "the couple is sitting at a table" (since "couple" is singular and they're sitting at the table, not "on" it).
3. **Location deion:**
- "beside see shore" has a typo and is awkward. It should be "beside the seashore."
4. **Impression of the interaction:**
- "it looks like guy is talking something" can be improved to "it looks like the man is saying something."
- "the girl seems to be not quite positive" can be more naturally phrased as "the woman doesn’t seem very positive."
- "they got awkwarded" is incorrect. You could say, "they seem a bit awkward."
5. **Final sentence:**
- "as normal couples do" is okay but could be enhanced by saying "as many couples do."
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### Revised Version:
"Hi friends! I recently took a trip to the US and snapped this photo. In the picture, a couple is sitting at a table outside a café by the seashore. It looks like the man is saying something, but the woman doesn’t seem very happy or engaged. I think they might be feeling a bit awkward, as many couples do during conversations."
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### Key improvements:
- More natural phrasing.
- Corrected grammar, including article use and sentence structure.
- Improved fluency and deion, making the overall response sound clearer and more professional.
Let me know if you'd like further details or additional feedback!
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